Holden, in J.D. Salinger’s The Catcher in the Rye, can be seen as a deplorable character due to his judgmental behavior. When Holden sees others who have talents, he tends to criticize them. For example, Holden judges Ernie, a famous piano player in a bar he visits, for being too good when he says, “…” (Salinger 24). Even though the piano player is talented, Holden criticizes him, perhaps because he is jealous. Judging someone without a solid foundation shows that he is a despicable person. Holden’s harsh judgments are further highlighted when he….(note transitional phrase to link to topic sentence and show addition of a new point)…
10B Sample paragraph
In The Catcher in the Rye by J.D. Salinger, Holden is portrayed as a likeable character. First of all, Holden is likeable because he helps others. For example, Holden writes a composition for his roommate, Stradlater (Salinger 43). Even though Holden did not have any obligation to help his roommate, he does so out of kindness, making him likeable for many readers. Holden further appeals to readers by being thoughtful and considerate (note transitional phrase to link to topic sentence and show addition of a new point)…
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